A recap on the four steps:
1) who it's about
2) the circumstance
3) the conflict
4) the hook
Here are the first two:
Strong evidence implicates Nan, so she recruits her two best friends—a depressed, stay-at-home mom and a country music singer wannabe—to help keep her butt out of jail. The trio combs the Music City, following clues and miscues to uncover theft, infidelity, and deceit in both Randy’s personal and professional worlds. In the process, they encounter more types of addiction than shades of blonde. This is the conflict paragraph, but it feels a little vague. One or two examples of a clue or miscue would be stronger than just a list.
When the apparent suicide of Randy’s brother stymies the police, Nan, a long-time puzzle enthusiast, discovers an encrypted message buried in the words of his suicide note. The message could ensure her freedom . . . if she can get it to the police before the killer gets to her. The hook.
Isabelle Rochon, a modern American working at the British Museum, has met the man of her dreams. Who it’s about. There's only one problem: he lives in a different century.
To Lord Montagu nothing makes more sense than to keep his distance from the strange Colonial. However, when his scheme for revenge reaches a stalemate, he needs
Isabelle must find the case, or she'll be stuck in 1834 where they haven't heard of toilet paper or women's lib. The fact that she's falling in love with Lord Montagu isn't helping either. Staying would be the ultimate follow-the boyfriend move and she can't go through that again. This is okay, but needs the hook sentence. Is she facing an ultimatum? Is her life in danger? Does she have to choose between Montagu and flush toilets?
TO OUR FUTURE is a 95,000 word novel featuring such historical figures as Ada Lovelace and Charles Babbage. Fans of LOST IN AUSTEN will love the modern woman’s fish out of water foibles, while experiencing a more scientific and mechanical London. It is similar in tone to THE SECRET HISTORY OF THE PINK CARNATION, and Katie Macalister’s contemporary romances. It is a standalone novel with the potential to be a prequel in a series of steampunk romances. Nice wrap up paragraph.